A Germ Of Something (4/24)

[rsadasiv]

Scott, Bob, Leo, Jay-Z and Me

 

The feeling
Of being
Fourteen
And reading
The Great Gatsby
For the very
First time.
Is concrete
Yet ineffable
Present
Yet unattainable
Like the green light
At the end
Of that Long Island
Dock.

I'm craggy
And weathered
Just like
Robert Redford
With a bittersweet
Nostalgia
For an earlier
Time.
It's concrete
Yet ineffable
Present
Yet unattainable
Like the green light
At the end
Of that Long Island
Dock.

We were all
Young once
But only
That once
And yes
It was terrible
But I do
Miss it so.
Concrete
Yet ineffable
Present
Yet unattainable
Like the green light
At the end
Of that Long Island
Dock.

[Lee Knight]

I like it. I like the way the experience of the 14 year old turns into a craggy Redford. I mean, Rob is handsome. But he's craggy now, isn't he? He wasn't for Gatsby. I like what that does to me. It really drives the sense of longing nostalgia for youth. I'm a little mixed up with the form of the 3rd verse. I love that verse but am uncertain how it ties in with its 8 instead of 7 lines before the start of the refrain. It just feels a little off center but there very well may be a reason to your design...

 

Anyway, I dig it. (Oh, is the green light to be seen as a go signal?)  

[LCK]

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rsadasiv wrote:

Scott, Bob, Leo, Jay-Z and Me

 

 

 

The feeling

Of being

Fourteen

And reading

The Great Gatsby

For the very

First time.

Is concrete

Yet ineffable

Present

Yet unattainable

Like the green light

At the end

Of that Long Island

Dock.

 

I'm craggy

And weathered

Just like

Robert Redford

With a bittersweet

Nostalgia

For an earlier

Time.

It's concrete

Yet ineffable

Present

Yet unattainable

Like the green light

At the end

Of that Long Island

Dock.

 

We were all

Young once

But only

That once

And yes

It was terrible

But I do

Miss it so.

Concrete

Yet ineffable

Present

Yet unattainable

Like the green light

At the end

Of that Long Island

Dock.

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Fabulous.

[rsadasiv]

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Lee Knight wrote:

 

I like it. I like the way the experience of the 14 year old turns into a craggy Redford. I mean, Rob is handsome. But he's craggy now, isn't he? He wasn't for Gatsby. I like what that does to me. It really drives the sense of longing nostalgia for youth. I'm a little mixed up with the form of the 3rd verse. I love that verse but am uncertain how it ties in with its 8 instead of 7 lines before the start of the refrain. It just feels a little off center but there very well may be a reason to your design...

 

 

 

Anyway, I dig it. (Oh, is the green light to be seen as a go signal?)  

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The green light refers to the last line of The Great Gatsby (and in the book the green light refers to a light on the end of Daisy's dock):

Gatsby believed in the green light, the orgastic future that year by year recedes before us. It eluded us then, but that

[Monkey Uncle]

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Lee Knight wrote:

 

 

 

Anyway, I dig it. (Oh, is the green light to be seen as a go signal?)  

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I took the green light to be a channel marker (channel markers always have either a red or green light, depending on which side of the channel they're on).  From the foot of the dock, the green light looks like it's on the end of the dock, but it's really way out in the water.  As you get closer, you realize you're never going to reach it (unless you have a boat or you're a really good swimmer).