Members rsadasiv Posted May 29, 2013 Members Share Posted May 29, 2013 This was an early Dance Music For Grownups track, but it never worked out the way I thought it could. It's about a Euro-Disco DJ (with some borrowings from the plot of Ulysses) and my recent Daft Punk obsession is making me think I should try this again as a straight up dance track.Partial demo: http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=5566869Lyric needs cutting. Too much, too much.The sunScatters through the blindsCovers twistInto a tie that bindsThe breakfast nook,Where she cries and smokesLooking pastCurtains and plants. D. you knowI hate it when you go.Staring outOver the street below.Why don Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted May 29, 2013 Moderators Share Posted May 29, 2013 I love it right through the Version 4 verse then it falls apart for me. Assuming you're going to use it with the music I just heard, I think those lyrics will fly nicely. Nice. But after that and that chorus I'm lost. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted May 29, 2013 Members Share Posted May 29, 2013 Fabulous. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Moderators Lee Knight Posted May 29, 2013 Moderators Share Posted May 29, 2013 Lee Knight wrote: I love it right through the Version 4 verse then it falls apart for me. Assuming you're going to use it with the music I just heard, I think those lyrics will fly nicely. Nice. But after that and that chorus I'm lost. I take that back, I'm liking this too: Dance is a beatOf ecstasyRock is a soundOf needs unmet.Pop: melodyAnd unity.Jazz: harmonyAnd regret. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted June 3, 2013 Members Share Posted June 3, 2013 rsadasiv wrote: It's about a Euro-Disco DJ (with some borrowings from the plot of Ulysses) Ulysses has a plot? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rsadasiv Posted June 3, 2013 Author Members Share Posted June 3, 2013 Indeed it does, with some thanks to the Odyssey. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members oldgitplayer Posted June 3, 2013 Members Share Posted June 3, 2013 rsadasiv wrote: Indeed it does, with some thanks to the Odyssey. Is this Ulysses looking out over the Mediterranean or the Irish Sea? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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