Members rsadasiv Posted June 17, 2013 Members Share Posted June 17, 2013 My life has beenOn auto-pilot so longI forgot where I was goingWith this joke Lately things have been kind of chaoticBut I'm in the same place nearly every single dayGetting hit in the face by this punchLine It feels like a setupBut the rhythm's all wrongAnd in comedy, timing isEverything Comedy is historyPlayed in reverseComedy is historyPlayed in reverse It's funny when it happensTo somebody elseBut we both know exactlyWhat I'm talking about And it's funny, you knowThat the funny thing isThat it neverTurns out to be funny I'm dying up hereIn front of this brick wallA firing squadAnd an exposed brick wall Comedy is historyPlayed in reverseComedy is historyPlayed in reverse Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members LCK Posted June 18, 2013 Members Share Posted June 18, 2013 Great stuff. No other comments to make as far as I'm concerned. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Monkey Uncle Posted June 18, 2013 Members Share Posted June 18, 2013 I think the first stanza would work better if it was moved to the very end. Overall the lyric is quite interesting, but without music, it's hard to tell how well it's going to work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members Oswlek Posted June 18, 2013 Members Share Posted June 18, 2013 Monkey Uncle wrote: I think the first stanza would work better if it was moved to the very end. Overall the lyric is quite interesting, but without music, it's hard to tell how well it's going to work. Totally! I wouldn't have thought of that, but not only does that verse sound more interesting as a wrap-up, but "lately" a killer opening line. +1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Members rhino55 Posted June 18, 2013 Members Share Posted June 18, 2013 As always, I'm impressed. I don't think you need to change a thing, but if you wanted to a potential rhyme popped out at me. Comedy is historyplayed in reverse(where we)back out the graveyardand climb out the hearse Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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