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Brick Wall Blues


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My life has been

On auto-pilot so long

I forgot where I was going

With this joke

 

Lately things have been kind of chaotic

But I'm in the same place nearly every single day

Getting hit in the face by this punch

Line

 

It feels like a setup

But the rhythm's all wrong

And in comedy, timing is

Everything

 

Comedy is history

Played in reverse

Comedy is history

Played in reverse

 

It's funny when it happens

To somebody else

But we both know exactly

What I'm talking about

 

And it's funny, you know

That the funny thing is

That it never

Turns out to be funny

 

I'm dying up here

In front of this brick wall

A firing squad

And an exposed brick wall

 

Comedy is history

Played in reverse

Comedy is history

Played in reverse

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Monkey Uncle wrote:

 

 

I think the first stanza would work better if it was moved to the very end. 

 

Overall the lyric is quite interesting, but without music, it's hard to tell how well it's going to work.

 

Totally!  I wouldn't have thought of that, but not only does that verse sound more interesting as a wrap-up, but "lately" a killer opening line.  +1

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As always, I'm impressed.

 

I don't think you need to change a thing, but if you wanted to a potential rhyme popped out at me.

 

Comedy is history

played in reverse

(where we)

back out the graveyard

and climb out the hearse

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