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  • Brick Wall Blues

    My life has been
    On auto-pilot so long
    I forgot where I was going
    With this joke

    Lately things have been kind of chaotic
    But I'm in the same place nearly every single day
    Getting hit in the face by this punch
    Line

    It feels like a setup
    But the rhythm's all wrong
    And in comedy, timing is
    Everything

    Comedy is history
    Played in reverse
    Comedy is history
    Played in reverse

    It's funny when it happens
    To somebody else
    But we both know exactly
    What I'm talking about

    And it's funny, you know
    That the funny thing is
    That it never
    Turns out to be funny

    I'm dying up here
    In front of this brick wall
    A firing squad
    And an exposed brick wall

    Comedy is history
    Played in reverse
    Comedy is history
    Played in reverse
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    Before you leave the house, look in the mirror and take one thing off.

    -Coco Chanel

  • #2

    Great stuff. No other comments to make as far as I'm concerned.

    “I think you make yourself an antenna for songs, and songs want to be around you. And then they bring other songs along, and then they’re all sittin’ around, and they’re drinking your beer, and they’re sleeping on the floor.” —Tom Waits

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    • #3

      I think the first stanza would work better if it was moved to the very end. 

      Overall the lyric is quite interesting, but without music, it's hard to tell how well it's going to work.

      Beware of deepities.-- Daniel Dennett

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      • Oswlek
        Oswlek commented
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        Monkey Uncle wrote:

        I think the first stanza would work better if it was moved to the very end. 

        Overall the lyric is quite interesting, but without music, it's hard to tell how well it's going to work.


        Totally!  I wouldn't have thought of that, but not only does that verse sound more interesting as a wrap-up, but "lately" a killer opening line.  +1


    • #4
      As always, I'm impressed.

      I don't think you need to change a thing, but if you wanted to a potential rhyme popped out at me.

      Comedy is history
      played in reverse
      (where we)
      back out the graveyard
      and climb out the hearse
      ...

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