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    Just noodled around with this last night... very raw.

    http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11772561
    Updated version: http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11775794

    I don't know what it's about yet... the lyrics are temporary I suppose. Is the melody too familiar? I'm picturing a stark beginning... maybe not a proper chorus... but the song keeps building to a lush ending.

    Not sure yet... really, it's just an hour of noodling late last night. Progress? Scrap?

    We could battle it out
    With such good intent
    We could put up a wall
    And hide behind it
    We could make up a scene
    And act out the parts
    Play them all...

    We could write a new page
    And use fancy words
    We could write a new tune
    And sell it to the first one who is there
    Who promised the world our downfall

  • #2
    Of course you should finish it.

    You are in fine voice good sir.

    I like the lyrics also.

    reminds me of bread for some reason.

    I like bread.

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    • #3
      Bread... the band?

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      • #4
        Yeah! It does have a little of Bread's "If" in it. But not really... you don't need to change any of the melody, it just has a tinge of it somewhere. So what's it mean?

        We could battle it out
        With such good intent
        We could put up a wall
        And hide behind it
        We could make up a scene
        And act out the parts
        Play them all...

        We could write a new page
        And use fancy words
        We could write a new tune
        And sell it to the first one who is there
        Who promised the world our downfall


        To me... it means, we could do all those things we're supposed to do. We could do all the things people feel we should, but... what do you want to do? What do I want to do. We've got a problem, how do we want to deal with it and screw everybody else. This is on us.

        I'm just giving you the first thing that it meant to me since you said you weren't sure what it was about yet. That sort of owning up to my own feeling as I went through the initial stages of my divorce (we reconciled), that soul searching was a life changing process. To decide for myself and to not let the drift of others ideas and intent guide me. But to stop and and say, "What is it that I... ME... what do I want to do.

        That may not be what it's about for you though.
        ___

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        • #5
          Good intent
          Is like money spent
          On something you never really wanted
          ___

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          • #6
            Yeah... I was thinking I could go through all of these "We could" scenarios (maybe that's the name of the song... We could...), then resolve it at the end with a Nah, let's just do what we want kind of thing.

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            • #7
              But the real question is... who is the "we"?

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              • #8
                I have only one comment, really. It's simply beautiful.

                LCK
                “I started being a songwriter pretending I could do it, and it turned out I could.” —James Taylor.

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                • #9
                  Bread... the band?


                  Yeh - and I didn't mean a specific song... i wasnt hinting at a rip.... just has that lovely classic feel to it already.

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                  • #10
                    This kind of feel

                    Its not similar

                    but the feeling is there

                    Love this song

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                    • #11
                      But the real question is... who is the "we"?


                      You could easily make this about lovers. Build tension the whole song


                      We could battle it out
                      With such good intent
                      We could each put up a wall
                      And hide behind it
                      We could follow the script
                      And act out our parts
                      Play them all...

                      Then the release would be when it switches to "or we could make love/screw/however you want your characters to address coitus." Instead of the release part being an "or" you could even have be "I don't care as long as we end up..."


                      Given this scenario, I'm not as much a fan of the second verse.
                      ...

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                      • #12
                        You could easily make this about lovers. Build tension the whole song


                        We could battle it out
                        With such good intent
                        We could each put up a wall
                        And hide behind it
                        We could follow the script
                        And act out our parts
                        Play them all...

                        Then the release would be when it switches to "or we could make love/screw/however you want your characters to address coitus." Instead of the release part being an "or" you could even have be "I don't care as long as we end up..."


                        Given this scenario, I'm not as much a fan of the second verse.


                        I like what you've done with the verse. Yeah, this may simply be a love song.

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                        • #13
                          Even before listening, I was going to type "yes". Out of professional courtesy, I listened and I think I was right.
                          Don't listen to Justin.
                          LCK - 2/21/2012

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                          • #14
                            OK... I've decided to go for a not-so-Bread production. I'm going to Toast it... something a little darker... a bit seasoned.

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                            • #15
                              We could battle it out
                              With such good intent
                              We could each put up a wall
                              And hide behind it
                              We could follow the script
                              And act out our parts
                              Play them all...

                              We could let it escalate
                              Turn into a siege
                              Stay secure behind our walls
                              Might even make it a few weeks
                              We could follow the script
                              and act out our parts
                              Play them all...
                              ...

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