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  • WIP - When It Comes to You

    Hey guys, I've been working on this one for about a week or so. I recorded a rough mix to test out the flow of the song. Still working on the 2nd verse and bridge, but this should give a good idea of the sound so far.

    I want your opinions on the lyrics, melody and also the strength of the chorus. And also any suggestions to improve the song. I'm a bit on the fence for the chorus, not sure if its catchy enough.

    Anyway, lyrics are in the song description

    It might be a bit pop-heavy, just so you know. lol

    -> Here's the Link

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    It's really nice. I like it a lot so far.

    “I started being a songwriter pretending I could do it, and it turned out I could.” —James Taylor.

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    • oldgitplayer
      oldgitplayer commented
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      I think it's pretty good as a pop love song. I have 2 suggestions that are hopefully of some benefit:

      1. The melodies of the 3 sections sound good to me, but after the Pre-chorus (which is really nice melodically), the Chorus drops back and sounds as if you have returned to a verse. So I think the Chorus needs some melodic build.

      2. You haven't nailed the phrasing of the song title, 'When it comes to you'. I'm hearing, 'Whenitcomes to you'. Try placing the emphasis on the verb, 'comes', and space out the words a bit......'When it ca-hums tooo yooou.'

      But keep at it.....it should be a good one.


    • davie
      davie commented
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      LCK wrote:

      It's really nice. I like it a lot so far.


      Thanks LCK, it means a lot coming from you. .png" alt=":smileyhappy:" title="Smiley Happy" />

       

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