My favorite band is The Band, and a lot of their songs take place in historical situations--"The Night they Drove Old Dixie Down", "Acadian Driftwood", "King Harvest Has Surely Come", and so on. I very rarely write in that style, but a horizon project is compelling me to hone my narrative writing chops. This is the first attempt. I think I still need a bridge, but I've got 4 or 5 different directions I could go with it, so I was hoping to get some feedback about soft spots in my story before I proceed.
We got a car full of crates full of bottles full of liquor and a white-knuckle night ahead
Under cover of the falling snow
If there was any other way to do the things we've got to do, then that's what I would do instead,
But there's no other way to go.
(chorus) The river's never looked so wide
Purple gang's waiting on the other side
If I could hear the ice cracking, I would turn around, and wouldn't stop until the tires hit concrete.
But the only sound I hear is the rattle of the bottles of the whiskey in the backseat.
February clouds hide the sliver of a moon and we're halfway from dusk til dawn
I've never seen a darker night
The D P D is on the lookout, so we can't turn the headlights on
I'm just aiming at the skyline lights