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Come a Little Closer (new slowed down resonator demo 10/17)


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Still messing around with open D.  I think I'm going to order a Gretsch Honney Dipper in the next couple weeks.

Any and all comments welcome.

 

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Come a Little Closer (resonator) 

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Come a Little Closer

Come a little closer

I can't see where you are

Come a little closer

Why else are you in this bar

The freaks come out at night

So should you

You can't tell me

You're not a freak too

 

You can only fight it for so long

You can only hide it for so long

 

Come a little closer

Loosen up that stance

Come a little closer

Show me how you dance

The stars come out at night

So should you

This is your chance

To be my star too

 

You can only fight it for so long

You can only hide it for so long

 

 EDIT:  The lyric after being forum'd

 

Come a little closer

I can't see who you are

Come a little closer

Why else are you in this bar

The freaks come out at night

So should you

You can't tell me

You're not a freak too

 

You can only fight it, fight it, fight

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rhino55 wrote:

Still messing around with open D.  I think I'm going to order a Gretsch Honey Dipper in the next couple weeks.

Any and all comments welcome.

 


Come a little closer

I can't see where you are

Come a little closer

Why else are you in this bar

The freaks come out at night

So should you

You can't tell me

You're not a freak too


You can only fight it for so long

You can only hide it for so long


Very cool!!! I looked up a Honey Dipper. Like a steel faced Dobro. Well, by all means! :) That seems like it would fit you to a tee. So... I love it. The melodic rhythm of your opening line grabs with teeth. Nice. I do feel that halfway through the verse and into the chorus it loses that bite of the first line though. Only through lack of development.

 

The first thing that came into my mind, and only one idea out many I'm sure, is to double up on your cadence of those last 4 lines of the verse.

The freaks come out at night, so should you
You can't tell me, you're not a freak too

 

To give a sense of racing into that chorus. So the 1st half of the verse would have that cool JJ Cale thing, but then you get more Ry Cooder on it and quicken to pace and frequency of the story.

 

Similarly, with your chorus, it totally works but feels to me like it needs more rhythm in the lyrics. Maybe...

 

You can only fight it, fight it, fight... for so long
You can only hide it, hide it, hide... for so long

 

Or not. Awesome start dude.

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rhino55 wrote:

 

 

Still messing around with open D.  I think I'm going to order a Gretsch Honney Dipper in the next couple weeks.

 

Any and all comments welcome.

 

 

 

Come a little closer

 

I can't see where you are

 

Come a little closer

 

Why else are you in this bar

 

The freaks come out at night

 

So should you

 

You can't tell me

 

You're not a freak too

 

 

 

You can only fight it for so long

 

You can only hide it for so long

 

 

 

Come a little closer

 

Loosen up that stance

 

Come a little closer

 

Show me how you dance

 

The stars come out at night

 

So should you

 

This is your chance

 

To be my star too

 

 

 

You can only fight it for so long

 

You can only hide it for so long

 

 

 

 

 

I love it. I love the guitar, the vibe, the storyline.

A couple things lyrically:

Come a little closer

I can't see where you are

This makes sense only if the guy is drunk. It would make more sense to say that he can't see who she is, not where she is. But if he's drunk, then it kind of works.

 

Why else are you in this bar

The freaks come out at night

This works better than what you sing on the track because there you're repeating the word come, but if it's a matter of what works rhythmically, then I'd let it slide.

 

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Lee Knight wrote:

 

 

 

 

 

 

Similarly, with your chorus, it totally works but feels to me like it needs more rhythm in the lyrics. Maybe...

 

 

You can only fight it, fight it, fight... for so long

 

You can only hide it, hide it, hide... for so long

 

 

 

Or not. Awesome start dude.

 

^That leaped into my mind when listening and it sounded awesome.  I hope you incorporate it, Ryan.

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I see what you did there with the dear.

 

So the doubled up cadence works pretty well. I might leave the same amount of space musically and add some background "come a little closer" maybe make it sound like a megaphone or something. I'll have to get in a band setting to see if that works.

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I like this one a lot  - it's all going to be in the full band treatment I think.  This is like down and dirty  blues more than anything.  If the band brings in what G. Harrison called "the little bits" (ie short lead phrases and percussion accents and fills and a couple full stops in the right places,)   I don't think it will need more chord changes.  Keeping that evil-intention slow pulse on one major/minor uneasy chord for such a long time will make the simple changes in the chorus all that more satisfying...don't scratch it until it really itches a while later sort of thing. 

 

Ryan you're a natural - 

 

nat whilk ii

 

 

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LCK, as far as conveying the feeling of being onstage in a noisy bar goes... that's not really what I'm going for. I mentioned that earlier because most of the experience I have in bars is being on stage and... write what you know, right?

 

That's actually one of the reasons I liked the "who" instead of "where" suggestion. It works given my experience but also brings a broader meaning to the table. For me this is all about getting somebody to loosen up and dance.

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solo

 

I did a gig with two other songwriters, where we each play a solo set and then all play together trading off songs.

 

The fact that it worked solo, let's me know that when I get it with a band, it's going to work really well.  (at least that's what I'm telling myself)

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