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  • If We Died Tomorrow - Lyric Interpretations Please

    Thoughts? This is a bit of a theatrical singalong. 

     

    --

    Verse 1
    Hello, the ground is now shaking
    I'd really love to be with you right now
    You hear a scream; the building just caved in
    This cold December....
     
    Pre-Chorus
    the world as we know, it is ending.
    So please, let's just stop this pretending.
    But do you regret how we left things
    now everything is falling down?
     
    Chorus
    but now that man kind is falling, I need to say my last goodbye.
    So I will phone and keep on calling
    and see you on the other side.
    Singing la la la
    So will we change when faced with death?

    Verse 2
    Don't go, with all that we've been through,
    your face is as familiar as mine.
    Hear people sing a wonderful prelude
    We'll sing together...
     
    Pre-Chorus
    The world as we know, it is ending.
    So please, let's just stop this pretending
    So do you regret how we left things
    now everything is falling down?
     
    Chorus
    So now that man kind is falling
    I need to say my last goodbye.
    so I will phone and keep on calling
    and see you on the other side.
    Singing la la la
    So will we change when faced with death?
     
    Middle 8
    Ceasing to exist
    If there were nothing left
    I'm just thinking if....
    If we died tomorrow
    If there were nothing left
    If we died tomorrow
     
    Last Chorus
    you see if man kind were falling
    I'd need to be with you tonight.
    So I will phone and keep on calling
    to be with you right by your side.
    Singing la la la
    and I will love you in my last breathe, 
    We change when faced with death. 
     
    I'm a sharpened flat - I'm a natural.







    Originally Posted by bloodxandxrank


    ... If all else fails make the guitarist do it.....



    ^On the matter of learning harsh vocals.^








    Originally Posted by wrongnote85


    They wont go away, they'll just start making dubstep.



    ^On whether the '-core' bands will ever go away^

  • #2

    Wait, you want us to tell you what the lyrics mean?   Is this a quiz?

    If it's not metaphorical, then it sounds like it should be called "Damn I Shouldn't Have Fallen in Love with An Arsonist" and the buildings she set on fire are falling on top of you while you're trying to get a signal to tell her you're still in love with her.  Or "Love in the End Times" - you're both evangelicals...ah, but who will be saved?   

    Feels like without some more detail the death stuff is just cheap unearned pathos.  We're supposed to treat those lines with enormous gravity that you haven't really justified I think.   Not sure it hangs together.  My $.02.

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    • LCK
      LCK commented
      Editing a comment

      mbfrancis wrote:

      Feels like without some more detail the death stuff is just cheap unearned pathos.  We're supposed to treat those lines with enormous gravty that you haven't really justified I think. 


      There's something here. It's alive with emotion, but I think it needs a nail to hang some of that emotion on.

      I mean, frankly, with the right music & production it might work as is. But I'd personally like there to be more of a road map to who and where these people are.


  • #3
    Revisions made.

    Tried to emphasise certain points of the narrative a bit more clearly. What is the lyric saying now?
    I'm a sharpened flat - I'm a natural.







    Originally Posted by bloodxandxrank


    ... If all else fails make the guitarist do it.....



    ^On the matter of learning harsh vocals.^








    Originally Posted by wrongnote85


    They wont go away, they'll just start making dubstep.



    ^On whether the '-core' bands will ever go away^

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    • #4
      Tragedy has a way of clarifying the truth. Without the distractions of the day to day I'll bet what we have together is clearer now for you now, so I'm calling you to hear you say it but I fear you've already passed, never fear though, see you soon on the other side

      What I don't see....
      __________
      Ain't no sacrilege to call Elvis king
      Dad is great and all but he never could sing -
      Jesus

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      • #5
        ...is any repetitive hook or title resolution etc. I don't see any hint of structure. I'm not saying it isn't there, but I don't see it.
        __________
        Ain't no sacrilege to call Elvis king
        Dad is great and all but he never could sing -
        Jesus

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        • LordBTY
          LordBTY commented
          Editing a comment
          It's definitely there, I can promise you. The structure is:

          Verse 1
          Pre-Chorus
          Chorus
          Verse 2
          Pre-Chorus
          Chorus
          Middle 8
          Chorus/Coda/Tie Off

          HOWEVER, I am looking to see how clearly the meaning and sentiment is expressed, nothing else. That's partially why I've written it as a continuous prose, not clearly structurally outlined.

      • #6
        Got it
        __________
        Ain't no sacrilege to call Elvis king
        Dad is great and all but he never could sing -
        Jesus

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        • LordBTY
          LordBTY commented
          Editing a comment
          Further revisions made and structure outlined to see if it helps/ makes it more readable.

      • #7

        Significantly better than the first write-up. 

        If this were my song I'd make the PC repeat and take the idea out of the second PC and make it the V2, since that doesn't really offer anything new.  And make it more present, don't say "her words aren't receiving" which doesn't mean anything, so "the other end keeps ringing".  But I'll keep calling because I have to hear her voice before the whole thing burns down.

        Don't listen to Justin.
        LCK - 2/21/2012

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        • #8
          My interpretation, it's a bit too repetitive. I know that doesn't matter but it's my interpretation. the tune may make a difference though.

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          • #9
            My interpretation: Sounds like it's about saying goodbye to a sweetheart during a winter earthquake.

            What that has to do with all mankind isn't clear, but maybe it doesn't have to be. If the words work well with the music, you're there.

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